I don't really like this page. It feels, well... like it's missing something. (cough) Besides the dialogue. The initial actual for realz written scene (the pages with Xan and James were modified from some stuff written in narrative format) included some dialogue along the lines of "oh, come on, I've never done anything to you!" and "I'm sorryyy, I'll try not to make it hurt too much" and "I WILL DESTROY YOU LIKE THE INSIGNIFIGANT BEING THAT YOU ARE." Or something like that.
Xan is much more of an enthusiastic killer than Saerin.
But that said, I still feel like compared to the last few pages, this one's very... empty, and feels like it's missing something. Maybe it's the backgrounds. Maybe it's the fact that I'm falling asleep on my feet. Butt. Y'know. Maybe it's the rushedness. I like the inset panel (no room for background there, anyway) and the final panel kinda, but of the top two I really only like James being all like "AW COME ON SISTA DON'T STAB ME TOO".
By the way, if one other person buys something, it's double page time!
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(buy my stuff) - May 23, 2010 - 0409
I don't really like this page. It feels, well... like it's missing something. (cough) Besides the dialogue. The initial actual for realz written scene (the pages with Xan and James were modified from some stuff written in narrative format) included some dialogue along the lines of "oh, come on, I've never done anything to you!" and "I'm sorryyy, I'll try not to make it hurt too much" and "I WILL DESTROY YOU LIKE THE INSIGNIFIGANT BEING THAT YOU ARE." Or something like that.Xan is much more of an enthusiastic killer than Saerin.
But that said, I still feel like compared to the last few pages, this one's very... empty, and feels like it's missing something. Maybe it's the backgrounds. Maybe it's the fact that I'm falling asleep on my feet. Butt. Y'know. Maybe it's the rushedness. I like the inset panel (no room for background there, anyway) and the final panel kinda, but of the top two I really only like James being all like "AW COME ON SISTA DON'T STAB ME TOO".
By the way, if one other person buys something, it's double page time!